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in betweens -set of four- by ~idiotekniQues:iconidiotekniQues:





caloric thought

somewhere between the intake,
of calorie eight hundred and forty seven,
and nine hundred twenty two,
i had this un-categorized, salty thought.

but by the time i found a low carb pen,
i digested it.




smoky pauses

in the midst of drags,
of cancer's pen,
and stained brown thought,
lie the tales of merry organs.

and with a warning i cough,
stories lost in smoky air.




ignition

winter gives me time to think,
with periods of waiting
for my auto to heat,
before i can be assimilated
on rounded rubber feet.




last call


in between shots
of caramel friends,
stumble jokes that rip
through monotony and
captive audiences.

it was during this time ,
a slurred slip
cost me her affections.
©2005-2009 ~idiotekniQues
:iconidiotekniques:

Author's Comments

about brief moments, in between others.

many thanks to ^coshdaddy for the DD

a :blowkiss: to =almostlighthearted whose art sparks a lot of my soul's verbal motions.

:sing:

Daily Deviation

Given 2006-04-20

We get a four-for-one special inin betweens -set of four- by =idiotekniQues. Each piece draws from the next and pulls you forward onto the next brief moment in time. A short, but well-formed collection. (Featured by `coshdaddy)

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:iconzebrazebrazebra:
I hate it when people use the word 'chariot' to describe cars. I don't know why. Nothing to do with your work, it's just something that gets to me overall. =P

I love smoky pauses, it's just evil...and caloric thought is clever. But I think last call is the one that affected me the most.
:iconidiotekniques:
thanks, glad u like :)

maybe steed?

lol i usually use that but i've used it in two poems this past bunch of weeks already. perhaps it would sound better. not many people use chariot in regular dialogue around here on the east coast usa, how about down under?

--
"That's poetry. I'm full of poetry now. Rot and poetry. Rotten poetry." - e.h.
:iconradiophonic:
for my auto to heat?

--
Painting is silent poetry, and poetry is painting with the gift of speech. --Simonides
the Unknown Artists Project
:iconidiotekniques:
sometimes the most simple is the most obvious choice. given the plain language of the whole set, auto would go best. thanks.

--
"That's poetry. I'm full of poetry now. Rot and poetry. Rotten poetry." - e.h.
:iconradiophonic:
:) You're welcome.

I'm really enjoying your style. :peace:

--
Painting is silent poetry, and poetry is painting with the gift of speech. --Simonides
the Unknown Artists Project
:iconzebrazebrazebra:
Not used in common language, just in poetry. Radiophonic kind of answered the point anyway. =P
:iconidiotekniques:
danke :)

--
"That's poetry. I'm full of poetry now. Rot and poetry. Rotten poetry." - e.h.
:iconazura84:
I lIkE dIs, qUIte uNiquE. (^_^)d

--
"Sealed with lies through so many tears
Lost from within, pursuing the end
I fight for the chance to be lied to again"
Evanescence
:iconidiotekniques:
thank you.

--
"That's poetry. I'm full of poetry now. Rot and poetry. Rotten poetry." - e.h.
:iconazura84:
no, thank you for the experience. ^_^

--
"Sealed with lies through so many tears
Lost from within, pursuing the end
I fight for the chance to be lied to again"
Evanescence

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